tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-14879983.post4732960554165384506..comments2024-03-18T20:41:39.140-07:00Comments on C. E. Chaffin's Blog: Rare Prose-PoemC. E. Chaffinhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/02639448512282317750noreply@blogger.comBlogger4125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-14879983.post-55646089023126130562006-09-22T10:03:00.000-07:002006-09-22T10:03:00.000-07:00Anonymous--your criticism is duly noted. I though...Anonymous--your criticism is duly noted. I thought "whose legs are needles," etc., would accomplish anaphora, but obviously it grated on you.<br /><br />Jarod, the implication I sought was an infant and a mother, but I took the denotation out--where the sounds and touch of a mother trumped sight, or so I imagined.C. E. Chaffinhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/02639448512282317750noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-14879983.post-26856339975273578142006-09-22T00:35:00.000-07:002006-09-22T00:35:00.000-07:00This is a good idea! You ahve traveled quite a jou...This is a good idea! You ahve traveled quite a journey!<br />Cheers!White Squarehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04091445212688733015noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-14879983.post-69112805634373838462006-09-21T20:18:00.000-07:002006-09-21T20:18:00.000-07:00I'm usually not a fan of prose poetry, but I think...I'm usually not a fan of prose poetry, but I think this is successful (in terms of what I expect a poem to do). I love the closing. The final question felt at first as if the answer should be instantly apparent to me; yet that moment gave way to utter indecision. It's a tough one.JKAhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06803670271920839776noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-14879983.post-8288054367021154462006-09-21T20:04:00.000-07:002006-09-21T20:04:00.000-07:00The only thing standing between this half-chewed c...The only thing standing between this half-chewed cud and good poetry is a little work (which would include the elimination of all those instances of "whose").Anonymousnoreply@blogger.com